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无断推文!都别拦着我啊啊啊!!!  

2008-11-21 18:01:47|  分类: 英文同人Take Com |  标签: |举报 |字号 订阅

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Well,我最近心血来潮上了fanfiction,居然很好运气地找到一篇“已经完坑”(重点)并且人物形象很符合原著的月(ユエ)中心魔卡少女樱(Cardcaptor Sakura)同人。

Take Comfort
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1652260/1/Take_Comfort

事先声明,虽然这文人物几乎不走形,但是自有其天雷极致的特色……为何能在甜蜜温馨又不走形的状态下还能那么雷,那说明作者实在很有功力= =||||||

一般的CCS同人文都会有不同程度的OC(原创角色)和OOC(脱离原著角色),并且多有“新的危机”等等自我中心和非常任性的超越玛丽苏的情节,因此显得相当低龄和天雷。此文的特色在于仅仅描写各个角色日常的生活以及内心的变化,推动故事发展的要素都在于角色之间的交流,并相当的客观自然——但仍然雷……

最大的雷点是,此文有月*抚子的倾向……当然有雏慕情结的某人会被母性洗刷洗刷kirakira不是没可能的QTL

这日记绝对是无断摘抄了……不过在人气那么少的日记里应该不会有人注意到了吧啊哈哈哈哈!(鸵鸟状)

好吧,我废话够了,下面推文吧。


(真的不能保证能推得很有逻辑,毕竟我处于感冒并且恶搞因子全开的状态,如果忍受不了顺序错乱和任性翻译,请大大们点右上那个红叉或者alt+f4,谢谢。)

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(from CH1)
……
  He would not cry.  He would not allow himself.  That part was over.  But the cold space that was his heart ached with pain that was still too new.  Years had passed since that day of snow and loss, but they were years spent asleep in the Clow Book, or later in a hazy dream that was Yukito Tsukishiro.  To Yue, they were like months, and months compared to the decades with Clow were like days.  So how could anyone expect him to be past his grief ?

            Kissing -- it was just kissing: Touya kissing Yukito, Yukito kissing Touya, Yukito with his eyes closed and Yue seeing everything.  Yue being held and not being the one held.  Yue had been only marginally removed from the toothpaste taste of Touya’s mouth.

Touya, sturdy and dependable, was Yukito’s world.  But Clow Reed had been the universe to Yue: companion, creator, father, confidant, and best friend.  Yue brought his knees up to his chest, curling fetally, and crossed his arms over his them.  He turned his back to Touya.

            “Shh,” came a sound like wings whispering.  “If you move you’ll wake him.  Be still.”

            Yue’s eyes flew open, and were filled with a sight so unexpected that the shock pushed his pain aside.  Hovering above him, leaning over the sleeping Touya, was… well… an angel.  Though she wasn’t exactlyan angel, Yue began to understand.

            “It’s you,” he said softly.

            This time it was the celestial woman’s turn to look surprized.  “You see me?” she gasped.

            “Yes.”

            “You hear me too!”  She smiled radiantly and gently brought her hands together over her heart.  “My Sakura has gotten so strong!”  Her smile faded somewhat at she turned back to Touya.  “He can’t see me anymore, but sometimes in dreams… .”  She reached out, and touched her son’s face with an uncorporeal hand.

            “Because of me,” Yue confessed.  He wished that she had not come; he wished that she would go.  Nadeshiko was too glorious, and her corona like summer light warred with the winter in his heart.  She looked at him kindly.  Just to avoid her beautiful gaze, he carefully and quietly sat upright.

            Nadeshiko looked on him kindly, but this was not the one she would have chosen for her son.  She would have liked Touya to have children.  She saw how he was with Sakura; she knew he could be a good father.  And this young man had so many problems.  Still, she was not choosing, Touya was, and she saw how her son’s spirit calmed when he was with Yukito.  This one, who was and was not Yukito, was Touya’s choice, too.  She told him so.

            “Touya makes his own choices,” she said.  “Why haven’t you learned to take comfort in them?”  Her eyes, the vivid green that she had passed on to her daughter, met Yue’s own deep violet, and she saw the bleakness behind them.  “Why are you fighting against those who love you?”

            “I am not Yukito,” Yue tried to explain.

            “Of course you are,” said Nadeshiko with certainty.  “Where else did he come from?”

            “He’s a lie,” Yue hissed, louder than he had intended.  Touya stirred in his sleep.

            Nadeshiko’s face was solemn with disapproval.  As she shook her head slowly, Yue, who had never had a mother, was disconcerted with the shame that washed over him.  “Do you even know what you have?” she said.

            And then she giggled.

            Yue marveled at how she sounded like Sakura, or rather Sakura sounded like her mother.  Both had a sweetness, and a surety in goodness, that washed the world with beauty.  They were like their namesakes, bright flowers of spring.

            “You’re too serious,” she commented.  “Like my Touya.”

            Yue drew back from Nadeshiko’s hand as she gently reached to touch his face.  His bare back came against the cold wall with a muffled thud.  “Don’t,” he said.

            The noise and sharp movement startled Touya awake.  Speculation crossed the boy’s features as he looked at Yue.  “Yue,” he said, more than one question evident in the single word.  “Were you talking to someone?” he asked finally, after a long silence, choosing the simplest query first.

            Yue’s reluctance to answer was evident on his face despite his customary solemn expression.  But Yue hated lies, so he answered, uncomfortably, “It was your mother.”  He took advantage of the moment by clambering out of the bed, though less gracefully than he would have liked.  Touya had a quick incongruous image of Yue wearing Yukito’s pajama pants before Yue flared his wings.  He was hidden in a silver glow, and then there was Yukito again.

他已不会流泪。他不会允许自己这样。有些事情早已结束。但是在内心深处时时刻刻刺痛的冰冷的伤口却仍新鲜得淌血。离那大雪纷飞的离别日子不知已多少年,但那些岁月是在书中沉睡或在名为“月城雪兔”的迷梦中度过的。对于月而言,分别犹在数月前;而在他的时间观念里,几个月在与库洛相处的几十数百年里也不过是那么几天。谁能想象他能从那悲痛里脱身?

彼此相吻——仅仅是这样吻着,桃矢吻着雪兔,雪兔吻着桃矢,雪兔合起双眼但月能看到一切。月被拥抱着却不是被拥抱的那人,他只能勉强从桃矢口里的牙膏味上移开注意。

桃矢是那么地强壮和可靠,他是雪兔的整个世界。但库洛·里德是月的整个宇宙:同伴、创造者、父亲、交心的知己和朋友。月像胎儿一样蜷起,膝盖贴着胸口,双手紧抱着自己。他转过去背对着桃矢。

“嘘……”一个恍如风的呢喃的声音响起,“你再动的话,会把他吵起来的。安静点。”

月拂开眼帘,眼前的景象令人难以置信,那份震撼将他的痛苦推开了。在他上方漂浮着的,俯视着沉睡着的桃矢的,是……呃……一个天使。但她并不是一个有实体的天使,月渐渐明白了。

           
“是你。”他柔和地开口。

这次轮到来自天堂的美人转头惊讶地看着他。“你看得到我?”她微微喘息。

           
“是的。”

“你还能听到我说的话!”她灿烂地笑了,端庄地将双手按在心上,“我的小樱越来越强了!”但她的微笑在视线转回桃矢身上时消隐了,“但除了在梦里,他再也见不到我了……”她伸出并无实体的手抚摸着儿子的脸颊。
 
“因为他的魔力给了我。”月接了下去。他希望她从未来过并且现在就离开。抚子是那么秀丽圣洁,她的光环犹如夏日阳光,对抗着他内心的寒冬。她慈祥地看着他。为了逃避她那美丽的眸子,他小心翼翼并安静地端坐了起来。

           

抚子仍温柔地注视着他,但这不是她愿意为她的儿子所挑选的人。她更希望桃矢能有自己的孩子。她一直看着他如何照顾着小樱,所以她知道桃矢可以是个好父亲。而眼前这个年轻人在许多方面都不尽人意。尽管如此,选择权不在她而在桃矢,她也看到了儿子的心灵在与雪兔共处的时候有多么平和。眼前这个人,他既是雪兔又不是雪兔,也是桃矢所选择的人。于是她这样告诉他。

“桃矢做了选择,”她说,“为何你还不打算和他好好相处?”她的双眼,就像她带给小樱的双眼一样的蔚然翠绿,注视着月深紫罗兰的双眼,她看到那之下的荒芜。“为何你要对着爱你的人们全副武装?”

“我不是雪兔。”月解释道。
          
“你当然是,”抚子无比肯定地说道,“不然他是从哪里来的呢?”
          
“他是个谎言。”月用比自己预想还低的气声回答。桃矢睡得有些不安稳了。
           
抚子满脸郑重的不赞同。当她轻轻摇头的时候,从未有母亲相伴的月忽然感到一阵羞愧不安。她继续问道,“难道你不知道自己拥有什么么?”
          
接着她咯咯轻笑起来。
          
她的声音听起来就像樱,或者应该说樱的声音听起来和她的妈妈一样,月为此惊奇。它们既甜蜜,又善良体贴,能将世界绦涤得清新可人。它们就像她们的名字一样,是春野里最明媚的花。

           
“你和我家的桃矢一样,”她下评论,“太严肃了啦。”
         
抚子温柔地抚上月的面容,但月推回她的手臂。他猛地后退,后背撞上冰冷的墙壁并发出沉闷的一响。“别。”他拒绝着。

这声伴着突如其来的动静将桃矢弄醒了。他看到月的时候有一打疑问在他眼里刷屏,“月,”好一阵沉默过后他最终决定挑个最简单的问起,“你在跟谁说话么?”

尽管月一如既往地板着脸,但任谁都看得出他不怎么愿意回答这个问题。可他讨厌撒谎,所以不甘不愿地回答了。“和你的母亲。”他总算抓住机会翻身下床,虽然动作比他预想的要粗鲁了点。桃矢在月伸展开雪白翅膀之前很不合时宜地想象着月穿着雪兔的宽松睡衣的样子。月把自己埋进一片银光里,然后变成了雪兔。

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(摘自第一章)
译后感:在月黑风高杀人……咳,的夜晚,月因为雪兔和桃矢睡得太贴实而被热醒了(大误,绝对是误),于是坐起来贴墙胡思乱想。按这样看来好像雪兔是睡里面的那个(支下巴思考/.\)。

这段大概写出了一个没娘又丧父的孩子初次见到婆婆时应有的羞涩(?)腼腆(?!),了结我长久以来的一个怨念啊~(仍旧误)

抚子妈妈和桃矢哥哥,你们两个不要欺负月欺负得那么起劲吧……


(from CH7)
“Sakura--” Touya hissed at his sister, his meaning clear to her.  His tone brought Yue’s attention to the older brother.  Touya didn’t have to be able to see the glowing to feel the intensity of Yue’s gaze; it crackled with animosity.  Touya did not back down.

“Yue-san!” Sakura tried again, her voice coming out in more of a yelp than she liked.  “Please, transform to Yukito-san.”

 Still intent on Touya, Yue answered carefully, “Is his presence required at this moment?”

“Well,” said Sakura uncertainly, “he’s been missing school.  He can’t miss school, Yue-san.  It will hurt his grades.”

Touya answered Yue himself, over his sister’s words.  “Yes,” Touya said forcefully.  “His ‘presence’ is ‘required’ now.  I don’t know what your problem is, but get over it.”

“Yue-sa…” started Sakura.

“Yue!” cried Nadeshiko, worriedly.

 “Dammit,” growled Touya, “Give Yuki back to me!”  He took a step forward toward Yue.  Light crackled at Yue’s fingertips and Touya was thrown back.

Everything happened at once.  Keroberos transformed as fast as lightning, and grabbed onto Yue’s arm with his teeth.  Nadeshiko interposed herself between the two men.  Sakura reached into her shirt and pulled forth her key.

“Do not lay a hand on my child!” screamed Nadeshiko at Yue.

“Yue!” said Sakura.  In her hand, the key had become her staff.  Her words had a hardness that she had never used before.  “I command you. . . to transform, now!”

Keroberos had pulled his brother to the ground.  Although he had released Yue’s arm from his jaws, he menacingly stood over the Moon Guardian.  So he alone saw the look that Yue cast toward their Mistress, a look of total despair, before the transformation took place.  Strangely, Keroberos was caught up in the magic circle as well, and as Yukito appeared, Kero was again in his small form.

(出处:第七章。)
“樱——”轻声制止他的妹妹,意思非常明确。他的声调让月把注意力放回作为兄长的他的身上。桃矢丝毫不能直视月益渐波澜汹涌的眼神,那里面揉满了恨意。桃矢能做到的只有寸土不让。

“月!”樱再次请求,她的声音尖而短促,超出了常态,“求你了,变回雪兔哥吧。”

月的注意力仍在桃矢身上,他谨慎地以问作答:“现在他必须出来么?”
“那个……”樱犹豫着回答,“他缺课好久了,月……这样下去的话他会留级的。”
           
桃矢回答的音量盖过了樱。“对,”他加重了语气,“他‘现在’‘必须’回来。我不知道你哪里出了问题,不过麻烦你先放一边。”

桃矢还有话要说,但月早截住他的话头。“你没资格对我指手画脚!”他对着桃矢嘶吼。月之守护者的眼中的怒火带上了危险的意味。

“月……”樱只来得及发出一点点声音。

抚子惊恐万分地大喊:“月!”
          
“该死!”桃矢吼了回去,“把阿雪给回我!”

他刚对月迈出一步,月指尖的绽发出的魔法之光立刻将他击飞出去。

一切就发生在电光火石之间。克罗贝鲁斯闪电般恢复原貌,迅速地扑上去一口咬住月的手臂。抚子冲进两人中间。樱伸手掏出衣领里的钥匙。

“别对我的孩子动手!”抚子向月尖叫。
           
“月!”樱手中的钥匙已经化为星之杖。她简直不敢相信那么冷硬的话将从她齿间挤出。“我命令你……返回你的隐藏姿态,马上!”
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克罗贝鲁斯已将他的兄弟压倒在地。尽管他的森森白牙松开了月的手臂,他仍颇具威胁地站在月的上方。所以只有他看到月在变化之前投向樱的眼神,包含所有绝望的一瞥。怪异的是克罗贝鲁斯也被变化的魔法阵牵连,于是当雪兔出现的同时,克罗也变成了省电毛公仔模式。

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译后感:家暴啊,家暴啊- - 虽然最终肉体损伤的是在双方家长(?)监管下还要斗殴的俩,但是我相信心灵最受伤的是3天没睡兼感怀伤情的月……(fans情结发作
桃矢哥哥你在这个时候踩猫尾巴无异于点火药啊,难怪你被揍出脑震荡了……不过后来有阿雪陪你一晚不睡,乃也算赚到了吧!


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暂且推到这里……往下看有有趣的章节我会慢慢补充的。今天头真是快痛死了/.\

以爱的名义!我大概会有毅力去取得授权并翻完它吧……不过还是等头痛过了先……(爬床。

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